Students will be able to identify and record specific story elements within narrative poems. Students will also apply their understanding of narrative elements to create an original narrative poem.
Narrative poetry is a form of poetry used to tell a story, combining elements of storytelling (plot, setting, characters) with poetic elements (rhyme, meter), often including action and dialogue (from image [IMAGE 2] defining "narrative poetry"). Key story elements include settings/locations, characters (main/side), conflicts (internal/external), actions/events, dialogue/conversations, and sensory details/figurative language.
Today's lesson focused on narrative poetry, a powerful way to tell stories through verse, much like ancient Greek art depicted narratives on vases (from image [IMAGE 3] showing a Greek amphora). We explored three examples: "Isis" by Bob Dylan (from image [IMAGE 5]), "Romance in Durango" also by Bob Dylan (from image [IMAGE 6]), and "The Cremation of Sam McGee" by Robert W. Service (from images [IMAGE 7] and [IMAGE 8]). Students were tasked with identifying story elements in these poems and then applying these concepts to draft their own narrative poem, with an optional prompt about a family fleeing South Vietnam in 1975.
Question: Instructions: as we read the narrative poems, record specific examples of story elements in the note-taking aid below (provide at least two examples for at least four of the following six categories, your choice).
Answered By Alan:
Art Teacher Feedback: Alan, you've done a fantastic job identifying key story elements like settings, characters, conflicts, actions, and dialogue for both "Isis" and "Romance in Durango." Your examples are specific and clearly demonstrate your understanding of how these elements function within a narrative poem. You've captured the essence of the plots and character relationships well.
Revision Suggestion: For future analyses, try to include at least one example of "Sensory Details/Figurative Language" to capture the poem's imagery, like describing the "blistering sun" or "hoofbeats like castanets" from "Romance in Durango."
Question: Response Question: which of the three narrative poems was your favorite, and why? What did you like about this poem? Be as specific and detailed as possible, and be prepared to share your response.
Answered By Alan:
Art Teacher Feedback: Alan, it's great that you connected with the first poem, "Isis," and felt it had a song-like quality. That's a wonderful observation, especially since it is a Bob Dylan song! You're on the right track in identifying what resonated with you.
Revision Suggestion: To make your response even stronger, try to explain *why* it felt like a song. Was it the rhythm, the rhyme, the storytelling style, or something else specific that made it feel musical?
Question: Narrative Poem Creative Writing Assignment: Using the texts on today's OneNote page as a model, write your own Narrative Poem that tells a unique/ original story (you may draft/outline by completing the pre-writing/planning aid provided below). Your final poem must include the narrative elements covered last unit, and should be a minimum of 8 chunks in length (for reference, the three poems we read in class today were 13-14 chunks in length each).
Answered By Alan:
Your Narrative Poem:
My village was always a small one
With huts with thatched roofs and beds of straw
But everything changed with the war
The houses we once lived in were torn down and destroyed and there were no living plants or trees in site.
My family and I had enough of this
We decided to move south to Thailand to live a better life
Away from the constant bombs going off
Only hearing gunshots every day.
We found a ship that takes people to Thailand from Vietnam for free.
My family and I packed our bags and got ready to leave
Leaving behind our one and only home,
We found where the ship was and boarded.
While running away and sneaking out there were a lot of problems
In the pitch black darkness everything was a dark haze
Holding our breath as the guards crossed in front of us,
The snap of the twig underneath my brother's shoe makes our heart beat faster.
My mom and dad talk to multiple people to try to find a place to stay
In the last minute nobody would accept me, mom, dad, or my brother because they don’t want strangers in their house.
Mom and dad had a very sad face and wasn't really talking a lot because they couldn't find a home
We finally got accepted by an old women who let us stay in her apartment.
There was barely any space for us to sit on the boat so we had to stand for a long time
It was a 5 hour boat ride with no food or water.
We couldn't even sleep because of the amount of people snoring and talking.
We were also very cold because we were traveling in the very early morning
All of sudden, my brother falls of the boat into the freezing water.
Mom runs to the captain to stop the boat
My brother was just inches away from being killed.
After living in Thailand for a while we got a sign that we could go back
The war has ended so there were no more soldiers fighting everyday
When we got back we saw nothing but darkness
We were still happy though because we were able to go back to our home.
Art Teacher Feedback: Alan, your narrative poem is incredibly powerful and moving. You've chosen a compelling story and brought it to life with strong emotional depth and vivid details, especially in your pre-writing. The poem effectively conveys the fear, uncertainty, and resilience of the family. You've clearly incorporated many narrative elements, creating a cohesive and impactful story.
Revision Suggestion: In the line "The houses we once lived in were torn down and destroyed and there were no living plants or trees in site," consider using a more active verb or a stronger image to describe the destruction, perhaps "The war had ravaged our homes, leaving only torn ruins and barren earth."
学生将能够识别并记录叙事诗中的特定故事元素。学生还将运用他们对叙事元素的理解来创作一首原创叙事诗。
叙事诗是一种通过诗歌形式讲述故事的诗歌，它将讲故事的元素（情节、背景、人物）与诗歌元素（韵律、格律）结合起来，通常包括动作和对话（来自图片[IMAGE 2]对“叙事诗”的定义）。关键故事元素包括背景/地点、人物（主要/次要）、冲突（内部/外部）、行动/事件、对话/交谈以及感官细节/比喻语言。
今天的课程重点是叙事诗，这是一种通过诗歌讲述故事的有力方式，就像古希腊艺术在花瓶上描绘叙事一样（来自图片[IMAGE 3]展示的希腊双耳瓶）。我们探讨了三个例子：鲍勃·迪伦（Bob Dylan）的《伊西斯》（Isis）（来自图片[IMAGE 5]）、同样由鲍勃·迪伦创作的《杜兰戈的浪漫》（Romance in Durango）（来自图片[IMAGE 6]），以及罗伯特·W·塞尔维斯（Robert W. Service）的《萨姆·麦吉的火化》（The Cremation of Sam McGee）（来自图片[IMAGE 7]和[IMAGE 8]）。学生们的任务是识别这些诗歌中的故事元素，然后运用这些概念来起草他们自己的叙事诗，其中有一个可选的提示是关于一个家庭在1975年逃离南越的故事。
问题： 说明：当我们阅读叙事诗时，请在下面的笔记辅助工具中记录故事元素的具体例子（从以下六个类别中选择至少四个，每个类别提供至少两个例子）。
艾伦的回答：
美术老师反馈： 艾伦，你出色地识别了《伊西斯》和《杜兰戈的浪漫》中的关键故事元素，如背景、人物、冲突、行动和对话。你的例子具体而清晰地展示了你对这些元素在叙事诗中如何运作的理解。你很好地抓住了情节和人物关系的精髓。
修改建议： 在未来的分析中，尝试至少包含一个“感官细节/比喻语言”的例子，以捕捉诗歌的意象，例如描述《杜兰戈的浪漫》中的“灼热的太阳”或“马蹄声如响板”。
问题： 回答问题：这三首叙事诗中你最喜欢哪一首，为什么？你喜欢这首诗的哪些地方？请尽可能具体和详细，并准备分享你的回答。
艾伦的回答：
美术老师反馈： 艾伦，你与第一首诗《伊西斯》产生了共鸣，并觉得它具有歌曲般的特质，这很棒。这是一个很棒的观察，尤其因为它确实是一首鲍勃·迪伦的歌！你正在正确地识别出让你产生共鸣的地方。
修改建议： 为了让你的回答更有力，试着解释 *为什么* 它感觉像一首歌。是它的节奏、韵律、叙事风格，还是其他什么特定的地方让它听起来像音乐？
问题： 叙事诗创意写作作业：以今天OneNote页面上的文本为范本，创作一首讲述独特/原创故事的叙事诗（你可以通过完成下面提供的预写作/规划辅助工具来起草/构思）。你的最终诗歌必须包含上一单元所涵盖的叙事元素，并且长度至少为8个“块”（作为参考，我们今天在课堂上阅读的三首诗每首长度为13-14个“块”）。
艾伦的回答：
你的叙事诗：
我的村庄一直很小
茅草屋顶的茅屋和稻草床
但一切都因战争而改变
我们曾经居住的房屋被拆毁，没有一棵活着的植物或树木。
我和我的家人受够了这一切
我们决定南迁到泰国去过更好的生活
远离持续不断的爆炸
每天只听到枪声。
我们找到了一艘免费载人从越南到泰国的船。
我和我的家人收拾好行李，准备离开
留下我们唯一的家园，
我们找到了船并登上了它。
在逃跑和偷偷溜走的过程中，遇到了很多问题
在漆黑的夜里，一切都笼罩在黑暗的迷雾中
当警卫从我们面前经过时，我们屏住呼吸，
我哥哥鞋子下树枝的折断声让我们的心跳加速。
我爸爸妈妈和很多人交谈，试图找个地方住
在最后一刻，没有人愿意接受我、妈妈、爸爸或我哥哥，因为他们不希望陌生人住在家里。
爸爸妈妈的脸上带着悲伤，话也不多，因为他们找不到家
我们最终被一位老妇人收留，她让我们住在她的公寓里。
船上几乎没有我们坐的地方，所以我们不得不长时间站着
这是一次5小时的船程，没有食物也没有水。
我们甚至无法入睡，因为有很多人打鼾和说话。
我们也感到非常冷，因为我们是在清晨出发的
突然，我哥哥从船上掉进了冰冷的水里。
妈妈跑到船长那里，让他停船
我哥哥差点就被杀了。
在泰国住了一段时间后，我们得到了可以回去的消息
战争结束了，所以不再有士兵每天打仗
当我们回去时，我们只看到一片黑暗
但我们仍然很高兴，因为我们能够回到自己的家。
美术老师反馈： 艾伦，你的叙事诗非常有力且感人。你选择了一个引人入胜的故事，并以强烈的情感深度和生动的细节将其呈现出来，尤其是在你的预写作中。这首诗有效地传达了家庭的恐惧、不确定性和韧性。你清晰地融入了许多叙事元素，创造了一个连贯而有影响力的故事。
修改建议： 在“我们曾经居住的房屋被拆毁，没有一棵活着的植物或树木”这一行中，可以考虑使用更主动的动词或更强烈的意象来描述破坏，例如“战争摧毁了我们的家园，只留下残垣断壁和贫瘠的土地。”